What could have been
I wrote a whole long post from the roof of my apartment. It was pretty amazing. Not the post, really, the roof. But anyway, my battery ran out since although I have wireless up here I obviously have no eletrical outlet.
But here's what I originally wrote about and/or intended to write about:
1.trying to figure out if the people across the way have Christmas lights up
2.Ani DiFranco
3. How I'm self-conscious about my music tastes
4.How it's really hot in my apartment but not on the roof
5.The apartment downstairs that always smells like pot and sounds like rap music so I just assume they're having fun.
6.My neighbor who plays a different instrument every time I pass by including possibly the triangle.
7.Drinking red wine tonight with my friend Sara and our moms
8. smoking with Benny Bloodclot (an inside joke just for Sara since we're the only ones who truly appreciate how hysterically funny we are).
Now here's where you, my rabid fanbase of four to six facebook friends, are invited play along. If you want to see any of the above posts expanded on comment with the corresponding number. Think of it as choose your own adventure. I feel like someone told me there are adult choose-your-own adventures? Those would be so much fun to write. Maybe I can write those if I retire from being a journalist at age 28 like everyone at the magazine I intern at seems to.
But here's what I originally wrote about and/or intended to write about:
1.trying to figure out if the people across the way have Christmas lights up
2.Ani DiFranco
3. How I'm self-conscious about my music tastes
4.How it's really hot in my apartment but not on the roof
5.The apartment downstairs that always smells like pot and sounds like rap music so I just assume they're having fun.
6.My neighbor who plays a different instrument every time I pass by including possibly the triangle.
7.Drinking red wine tonight with my friend Sara and our moms
8. smoking with Benny Bloodclot (an inside joke just for Sara since we're the only ones who truly appreciate how hysterically funny we are).
Now here's where you, my rabid fanbase of four to six facebook friends, are invited play along. If you want to see any of the above posts expanded on comment with the corresponding number. Think of it as choose your own adventure. I feel like someone told me there are adult choose-your-own adventures? Those would be so much fun to write. Maybe I can write those if I retire from being a journalist at age 28 like everyone at the magazine I intern at seems to.
posted by diana at 10:49 PM
2 Comments:
Overall, this post is a strong sophomore effort that shows a growing level of confidence with the genre. Diana introduces numerous story arcs that may develop over time, such as the apartment roof and the multi-talented neighbor. She also continues to develop the adolescent identity issues she experiences as a young journalism student. Her writing exposes vulnerability in a way that is both endearing and entertaining to the reader.
Content: 8
Theme: 7
Style: 8
Overall: 8
wahoooo i love choose your own adventure, what a fun idea! p.s. now you have at least 4-7 facebook friend stalkers because i told pri about your blog so she could return the stalking favor. anyway i want
to hear about all of them but esp. your self-consciousness in music taste, and if in fact the downstairs neighbors are as fun-loving as it
would appear. and the multi-instrument guy. and also a full account of our hilariousness obviously. in conclusion, i'm no fun for the choose your own adventure thing but that's just because i want to read your witty writings on everything. this is the longest comment blogger.com has ever seen, kbye!
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